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Martin Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Sat Jun 02, 2007 3:38 am Post subject: |
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I don't think they're poodles... poodles have a pointier muzzle and curly fur, plus the tails of the twins look different. Heh... if not for the build and the fur pattern, I'd say they're Welsh Corgi, but then I'm not really sure.
Guess the only one who knows for sure is Vanessa. |
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JohnnyPsycho Royal Member of BonBon
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Vanessa Official Artist
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Ashton Gray Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Sat Jun 02, 2007 5:43 pm Post subject: |
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JohnnyPsycho wrote: | LOL don't sound so defeated, Ashton... |
Defeated? I think not. One must fight to be defeated, I simply offered an opinion. Besides, I'd never give up so easily. _________________ Silentium est aurum |
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kommy Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Sat Jun 02, 2007 8:08 pm Post subject: |
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Or, in English, they are mutts. Loveable mutts, but mutts all the same. Only aristocrats would concern themselves with maintaining breeds, I imagine. _________________ "Doktor! Are you sure this will work?!" "HAHA! I HAVE NO IDEA!" |
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Ashton Gray Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Sat Jun 02, 2007 9:34 pm Post subject: |
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Personally, I prefer a mutt dog over a thoroughbred, I love the diversity they represent. _________________ Silentium est aurum |
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JohnnyPsycho Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 6:20 am Post subject: |
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Heh, thanks for the information, Vanessa! The pic for the "real life" Dalia looks like a spaniel mix of some sort, though I'm not exactly a "trained eye" as far a dog breeds (I only had two dogs growing up, and they were both mutts).
I'll post more info (including a link) of my story when I get it posted. I've once again succumbed to my "literary OCD" and am rewriting and adding a bit into the first chapter so that it ties in better with the second chapter. _________________ Johnny's Fanfics (including Sureshot! A Bon Bon Tale)
Johnny's backstory
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Vanessa Official Artist
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Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 12:43 pm Post subject: |
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I checked the link and noticed that there are also pictures, and not only stories. If you want you can post, together with your story, the pictures of PBB's characters taking them (or putting in a link) from the free area bios (for example Dalila and Ophelia). As for your fursona you can post your personal pin-up and for daisy you can post the picture of her bio, or the first picture of Daisy in the Strip Tease Theatre ( is the same) . Knowing the characters the readers will be more involved in the reading. _________________
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JohnnyPsycho Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 1:29 pm Post subject: |
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Cool, thanks Vanessa. I've already provided a link in the text of my story, as well as numerous mentions of you and the site as well. I've already submitted the first chapter, and right now it's just pending approval from site admins, i believe (which is normal, but I'm not sure exactly how long it will take, since this is the first time I've submitted a story on that particular site). Now we just wait and see, and I'll post the link when I can. _________________ Johnny's Fanfics (including Sureshot! A Bon Bon Tale)
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JohnnyPsycho Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Mon Jun 04, 2007 3:26 am Post subject: |
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Okay, first chapter's up, plus I posted a couple of pics that Vanessa suggested. Right now, only my fursona's pinup is up; I posted the bio pic of Dalia and Daisy's strip-tease theater bio, but at the moment those are still pending review.
To read the first chapter of my fanfic, click here or do a search for it on Yiffstar's main page under the same title as this topic. My username there is the same as it is here, "JohnnyPsycho". _________________ Johnny's Fanfics (including Sureshot! A Bon Bon Tale)
Johnny's backstory
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Xebulon Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Mon Jun 04, 2007 11:17 pm Post subject: |
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I take my hat off to you Sir. Mere adjectives and adverbs cannot properly convey the sense of enjoyment I received from reading your story. I most eagerly await the next chapter.
Addendum: I especially like the switches between past and present. Always a nice touch, that.
You do realize though that there is no way that I can compete with works of this caliber. All that's left to me now is to retire and fade into obscurity. If everyone else here continues to produce writing this good, I'll be reduced to burning my rough drafts just to heat my tea. _________________ I like old jokes. With them I know when to laugh. |
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Ashton Gray Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Tue Jun 05, 2007 12:48 am Post subject: |
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Were I one to wear a hat, I'd doff it to you, Johnny. A marvelous peice of work once more. A highly enjoyable read, very amusing and thought provoking. Well done. _________________ Silentium est aurum |
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Vanessa Official Artist
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Posted: Tue Jun 05, 2007 1:04 am Post subject: |
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Fantastic, you're great! Thank you for pointing out the site to me and writing this fanfic! I hope everyone reads it! _________________
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JohnnyPsycho Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Tue Jun 05, 2007 7:16 am Post subject: |
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Thank you guys for your comments, I appreciate it. I was afraid that it was too long (I never really learned how to keep stories short and simple, I'm afraid), but so far I haven't heard any complaints about it.
And by all means, don't give up on your writing, Xebulon! I love everyone's stories that have been posted in here, and I'd hate not being around such a creative atmosphere. _________________ Johnny's Fanfics (including Sureshot! A Bon Bon Tale)
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LabrnMystic Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Tue Jun 05, 2007 8:18 am Post subject: |
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I'll have to print it out, becuase my laptop won't last long enough without my power cord. I'll try and read it and get back to you about it, but by the sounds of it, it'll be a great piece.
I'll have to start my writings up again too, though it may be a week or two Vanessa. I've gotten very busy over here, for we are in the last few months of my deployment. Hopefully, more free time will open up towards the end so I can put out more goodies for everyone.
Til then. _________________ The suspense is killing me. I hope it will last. |
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kommy Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Tue Jun 05, 2007 5:07 pm Post subject: |
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*grins* Finally finished. Not bad at all, Mr. Sureshot. Though I was somewhat shocked that the beloved Daisy did not make an appearance at all. I can definitely see you writing more chapters now, if only to make that happen at last.
I also found the ending text interesting to read and that I think I read it all before finishing your story. Always nice to learn a little something new. _________________ "Doktor! Are you sure this will work?!" "HAHA! I HAVE NO IDEA!" |
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JohnnyPsycho Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Tue Jun 05, 2007 8:18 pm Post subject: |
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Can't wait to hear what you think of it, Labrn...
As for kommy, don't worry about Daisy, she's pretty much the focal point of the entire second chapter... in fact right now I'm planning on "Mr. Sureshot" not making an appearance in the second chapter until the very, very end. I sort of wanted to build up Daisy's appearance in the story a bit (especially since I wasn't sure what her background was until Vanessa said something, which at that point I had already been most of the way through the first chapter).
As for the ending text, call it my overly fine attention to detail, but I sort of felt it would be easier for readers to understand the actions and motivations of characters if they better understood the world and time-period in which they lived. It's not even a "Native American thing" (though I suppose I did feel somewhat obligated to offer the information), I just enjoy learning about history, and lately this story has led me to research the time period more. So far, of what little I've written of Daisy's chapter, there's already some cultural notes on the old Texas cattle-drives and the Temperance movement.
Again, I'll let everyone know when I complete the next chapter. I promise there will be a bit more "action" in the next chapter (in more ways than one).
Also, Vanessa, I hope you're happy with the couple of pictures I posted. I already got some nice comments about them, so hopefully I can lure some more folk over here without looking too much like a "salesman". _________________ Johnny's Fanfics (including Sureshot! A Bon Bon Tale)
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Ashton Gray Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Tue Jun 05, 2007 10:45 pm Post subject: |
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JohnnyPsycho wrote: | Also, Vanessa, I hope you're happy with the couple of pictures I posted. I already got some nice comments about them, so hopefully I can lure some more folk over here without looking too much like a "salesman". |
With that sly grin plastered on your face, it may be quite the challenge. _________________ Silentium est aurum |
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Vanessa Official Artist
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Posted: Wed Jun 06, 2007 1:16 am Post subject: |
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JohnnyPsycho wrote: | Also, Vanessa, I hope you're happy with the couple of pictures I posted. I already got some nice comments about them, so hopefully I can lure some more folk over here without looking too much like a "salesman". |
Where are? Can you post here the link please? _________________
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Drake_Skyflyer Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Wed Jun 06, 2007 2:56 am Post subject: |
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Well she seems a sure fire shot match for Johnny (From how they each look), and great story by the way I still need to finnish mine up and get to the next chapter. _________________ "This is not a skirt, it is a kilt. It is not so restricting like pants and it has great airflow."~Drake |
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Ashton Gray Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Sat Jun 09, 2007 7:41 pm Post subject: |
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Johnny, I did'nt want to say anything right away but now that some time has passed and you've gotten a number of good reviews, I noticed something, in your story, you hair color is described once, as black, but when I look at your fursona, it's distinctly brown. _________________ Silentium est aurum |
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JohnnyPsycho Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Sat Jun 09, 2007 11:09 pm Post subject: |
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In my own mind, Johnny's hair color matches my own (as near to jet black as possible), and his fur is also a bit darker than shown in the comic. It's a simple matter of a difference between my own imagination and the color palette that Vanessa chose for him when she drew him. As far as I'm concerned Vanessa's version of Johnny is perfect, and I wouldn't dare change a thing. Besides, his pony-tail is a dark enough brown, and I personally didn't really distinguish much of a difference between dark-brown/brunette and black hair anyway... I figured maybe my fursona had spent so much time in the sun in places like the badlands and the deserts of the American West that his hair got sun-bleached anyway...
As for news about the next chapter, it's been some slow going (been sort of busy with other things this past week), but I think I should have something ready to post this week... maybe Wednesday, but more than likely Thursday or Friday (mind you, I am horrible about keeping up with deadlines, but I want to keep a momentum going with this story)... _________________ Johnny's Fanfics (including Sureshot! A Bon Bon Tale)
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Ashton Gray Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Sat Jun 09, 2007 11:16 pm Post subject: |
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I had a feeling that was the case but I just had to mention it. Looking forward to your next installment. _________________ Silentium est aurum |
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LabrnMystic Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Wed Jun 13, 2007 5:14 am Post subject: |
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Well, I finally got around to reading this after I printed it out Johnny. I must say, very well done. I think you got Dalila down pat. A wide range of emotions, a grand vocabulary (curse you! Now I'll have to use a thasaurus for my next writing )
Keep it up John Boy! _________________ The suspense is killing me. I hope it will last. |
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JohnnyPsycho Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Wed Jun 13, 2007 11:09 am Post subject: |
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LabrnMystic wrote: | Well, I finally got around to reading this after I printed it out Johnny. I must say, very well done. I think you got Dalila down pat. A wide range of emotions, a grand vocabulary (curse you! Now I'll have to use a thasaurus for my next writing )
Keep it up John Boy! |
Thanks for the compliments, Labrn, though I'm afraid I'm not as eloquent as I used to be. I sometimes stare at the screen for long stretches of time, trying to rack my brain, often futilely, to remember one word or expression from the dark recesses of my stockpile of vocabulary. Still, I suppose my writing would seem too dependent on "10-cent words" if I was throwing in as much obscure terminology in it as possible.
Aaaaaanyway, still working on the second chapter. I'll post an announcement when it's finally up on the site... _________________ Johnny's Fanfics (including Sureshot! A Bon Bon Tale)
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LabrnMystic Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Mon Jun 18, 2007 12:05 pm Post subject: |
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Well, I just found out I'll be going back on internet detail again this week. Which means I'll finally be able to get online for 8 hours at a time.
Also, My power cord came in, so I'll be back in action folks. I almost feel like Jynx with the internet withdrawl.
Don't worry too much about your wording Johnny. You did a great job. The only down side I can see coming from it, is how many people around here who are gonna take even longer now to post their stories because they're burying their muzzles in books trying to find the right words.
I myself will have the time to type Labrn's story, and I'm working on one I was doing awhile ago for Vanessa.
I'll also try to get back into sketching, and now coloring. Any of the ones I already have posted anyone want to see colored? or shall they remain sketched? _________________ The suspense is killing me. I hope it will last. |
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Ashton Gray Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Mon Jun 18, 2007 9:15 pm Post subject: |
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Good for you, Labrn, but why don't you leave the ones you've posted as sketches as sketches and post them again colered? _________________ Silentium est aurum |
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Xebulon Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Mon Jun 18, 2007 10:34 pm Post subject: |
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Glad to see your back Labrn. _________________ I like old jokes. With them I know when to laugh. |
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Marauder Royal Member of BonBon
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Posted: Sun Jun 24, 2007 8:09 pm Post subject: |
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Well, just dug through the story, and found it quite an enjoyable read. Should you wish, feel free to use my badger in the story.
Another thought just ocurred to me. With Stone being a north american badger, he's likely a native american as well. Wonder what tribe he'd be part of? _________________ I carry a gun because a cop is too heavy. |
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