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Symphony
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I have picked up writing again. I'm going to be writing journal entries from Constance's diary. I'll focus on what Constance experiences in Bon Bon, and I might want to use some fursonas or side-characters from the comic, if I may.
While many of the stories I have planned are heavily focused on sex, it's not all going to be like that. If you would like me to use your fursona, just let me know, and also whether it's for anything sexual. I'm not making any promises, though. Some characters are easier for me to use than others, as their species or occupation might be of use, and a sexual encounter wouldn't necessarily include Constance.
The stories aren't meant to be in any specific order. They are just going to be glimpses from her diary, and may not even take place in the same year. I'm going to be posting them in the story section, and edit the first post of this thread with a link to each. Some stories are just going to be a single entry in the journal, while others may be told through several entries.
The Mayflower Diaries:
The First Time
Comments are of course always welcome. Whether it's feedback on a story, or a suggestion for how to use a character or something else.
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You can use Drodel if you want... *gose and reads what you got up now.*
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You're more than welcome to use Meng Long in any way.
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Symphony
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| Posted: Sat Sep 24, 2011 2:33 pm Post subject: |
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| henkcobra wrote: | just read your first post
to be honest it turned me on
make more please. |
Thank you. I started thinking about it after you asked for Constance's first time in another thread. I hadn't really given any thought to it before, but found it interesting to come up with something for it. I might write more flashbacks about her time with Vivian one day.
I'm working on more right now. Nothing really spectacular, but I'm trying to include the town and some characters.
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Interesting read Symphony.
If you want to use Tsavo or the Lion's Den Pub feel free. Although sex is frowned on inside the pub. The key to writing Tsavo would be quiet, and polite, but a little gruff. The bar itself is described in my sig.
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| Posted: Sun Sep 25, 2011 10:37 am Post subject: |
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((Hey Symphony/Constance,
Okay, iffn you want to use Caroline you can. I'm not really sure how Constance would interact with the importer, but... who knows.
And, these are my thoughts on the story... so... them and $1.25 USD will get you a cup of coffee.
Anyway, about your diary entry. Um... I'm going to come at this from a different perspective. Did you want Constance's diary to be just about her sexual growth and adventures, or all about Constance? If you want it to be more the later (about all her life/adventures), it might work a spot better if you break up the story a bit.
For example, your whole bit of history with Vivian seems rushed. Which, in turn, made the whole diary entry read like a harlequin-romance book to me. It would have worked a lot better if your first diary or two entries were about Constance just meeting Vivian, and becoming friends with her. Doing things as neighbors first, going to school/music practice together, and then as friends, and then digging into things like their own budding curiosity about sexuality and the taboo. For example, Vivian could have snuck a bottle of her father's brandy, and convinced Constance to drink it with her. Both girls drink the brandy, and get really sick... but... in doing so, they bond together. That way, the next time, Vivian could bring up questions or thoughts about her body or Constance's... which, in turn, could lead them to exploring those avenues.
By writing it as you did, the entire story felt too... late-night Cinemax. So, while sexual and eros... it... lacked a connection with the characters for me.
Anyway, just some quick thoughts. )) |
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Symphony
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| Posted: Sun Sep 25, 2011 11:20 am Post subject: |
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Thanks for the comments, Caroline. 
The diary isn't going to be about everything that happens in Constance's life. It's just going to be various short stories that I want to write. The first diary entry was inspired by Henk asking about her first time. I started thinking about it, and realized that it was something I could use. It's also just meant as a flaskback, so the next entry I write won't be a follow-up to the first one. Constance hasn't been writing a diary all her life. It's something she has started doing shortly before coming to Bon Bon. At some point, she simply wanted to "tell" the diary about what happened back then.
It might go back to writing more flashbacks about her early sex life, but for now I'll rather focus on her present time in Bon Bon. There might be chronological order to the entries, but I don't plan for them to be following each other closely.
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| Posted: Fri Sep 30, 2011 8:00 pm Post subject: |
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*facepalm* shoot i thought i replyed on here... apperenly i forgot. Symphony i flat out loved your story. Can't wait to read what more your going to put. 
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Its ok Constance. I'll have to catch up. How many have you written so far?
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Dear Miss Mayflower, the fact that I'm a new-comer might be of use to you. If you so desire to use me. I just thought I would allow that even though this is an older post. I wish I had been on here much earlier... Maybe I could've spoken to many more of the royals of Bon Bon and contributed more...
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